Could use some work.

Overall, this track could use some work. There is potential in an unorthodox track like this (and I mean that in a good way). I don't know whether you were trying to achieve the trance feel or were going for something different, but since you titled it as such, I'll make the assumption. :]

Straight up, I don't feel the trance, and that's more a problem with the composition itself rather than the production. Trance is often very melodic, making good use of minor keys and (pretty much) always harmonizing chords and melodies to achieve that surreal, emotional sound. While this track is certainly melodic, and even energetic, they aren't cutting it. As I said before, whether this was what you were really trying to go for, I don't know, but I thought I'd give my two cents there.

On the production side, you have a very clean and pleasant mix, but it needs more variation. For example, the lead saw is carrying the listener throughout the entire track -- you use it extensively, but with its ever-present sound, it gets dull and even transparent after a while. You need to change it up a bit: filter sweeps, chorusing, and/or things to slightly vary the sound signature a bit to keep the listener on their toes. Spend more time making your mix interesting and dynamic, rather than just getting your sounds and composition in and calling it a day.

Anyway, I said a bunch, but I hope this helps. Look forward to hearing more from you.

Good stuff!

Very catchy and trance-like melody indeed. Props to your girlfriend and props to your sharp remixing skills.

All is not perfect, however, especially on the production and mastering side. While your sounds and sophisticated and outstanding, a lot of them are clashing each other for the overall sound space. This is a consequence of inadequate or no mastering, especially in the form of compression and EQ'ing, among other things. Spend more time touching up your individual tracks (as well as the final mix) to get that powerful, balanced and clean sound that will please your listeners' ears for ages to come.

Interesting (and good) sounds

You have some interesting sounds going on here, some that are clearly not akin to trance music and some that are. The bassline is absolutely rockin'. A bit repetitive, even for my taste, especially at the beginning, but as soon as the melodies and chords kicked in, this track started to shine.

The main issues with this track are mostly concerned with its production aspects: your saw lead in the latter half of the track could use 32464326 more layers and more of a presence. While the melody is great, it's not as powerful as it should be. As well, the opening instrument has some piercing highs -- a reasonable cut to these frequencies will respect the listener's ears a little better.

My personal tastes also dictate me to say that this mix could be a bit more balanced, especially with the percussion and the choir, but that's more a matter of taste than an actual technical issue really.

Good track! I hope to hear more from you.